Friday, 1 March 2013

BREAKING NEWS!!

Before Editing:
Miss Farr was talking to her class when a sneaky bird flew in the window.

During Editing:

Miss Farr was talking chattering to her lovely, beautiful, delightful, noisy class when all of a sudden sneaky, clumsy, brown bird sparrow flew in the window, right before their eyes.!

After Editing:
Miss Farr was chattering to her lovely, beautiful, delightful, noisy class when all of a sudden a sneaky, clumsy, brown sparrow flew in the window, right before their eyes!


*Based on a true story.



13 comments:

  1. Zakira told me all about it.

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  2. Dante and Joseph10:21 am, March 28, 2013

    Great editing

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  3. What a naughty birdy.






    BY:Hayley

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  4. Holy moly that sparrow was clumsy and flying where ever he wanted to go.

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  5. I hope the sparrow is alright now and having fun with with is family.

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  6. I bet Miss Farr got a big fright!

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    1. Krisha, Amy from D59:22 am, June 13, 2013

      Same! LOL.

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  7. WOW! Miss Farr you had quit a shoock. That must have been creepy

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  8. That must have hurted the sparrow a lot

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  9. Wow Miss Farr that is scary

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  10. What a cool way of showing how to edit. And OMG IT MUST'VE BEEN A REAL FRIGHT !!!!!!!!!!

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  11. Well, D6 I can see that you are very good at editing and I can see that you used many interesting words to describe your lovely,noisy class and that sneaky, clumsy brown sparrow.

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  12. poor sparrowI feel so sad for it . mabe it was blind.

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